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Deviousness `anmari has been spreading her infectious positivity throughout our community for over 6 years. Throughout this time Ana has been at the core of all things devious, passionately developing an eclectic gallery, helping organise devmeets, participating in chat events and also recently completed dedicating her time as a Community Volunteer. We are absolutely delighted to bestow the Deviousness Award for May 2013 to `anmari, congratulations! Read More
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Pros: I can see that some love and dedication went into the piece which is always a plus. The over all concept and design is interesting. It looks like you are trying to over come the fear of overlapping which is a hard lesson to learn.
Cons: While I can see that you are trying to overcome the fear of overlaping you still need to push this more which should help with your foreshortening. I feel like you were trying to fore shorten the arms but because the overlaping wasn't there it makes it look like the arms are pointed down and are stubby which is ruining the proportions. The breasts are too high on her chest and they should be about half a head lower. The hair overlaping the face shows some poor planning or making a mistake of where you were intending to go and tried to fudge the result. Sketch out your drawing lightly in pencil or better yet a light blue color pencil first and then ink over that. Then you scan it removing color or xerox it and the blue lines will vanish. Your inking could use some work. Try showing a variation of weight in your light to give the drawing movement and depth: think of your pen or brush strokes like a roller coster and you will get there.
Hope that helps.
The improvements: The anatomy on this artwork could use a bit of practice. The arms appear slightly short, the foot you can see is oddly positioned, the breasts appear to be a little bit too high on the chest (generally the nipple will align with the middle of the upper arm, and the elbow willalign with the natural waist) Another thing I see which looks slightly strange is the hair. the hair behind the character looks really good, however the hair over her face and body is transparent, and it bothers me a little bit.
Things I would love to see:
Color, again would lookoutstanding on this artwork.
This was a really good try, and I would love to see you try this again in the future! I really hope that I do not seem too harsh.
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